Jupiter Jet Issue One Page 12 - Script to Page Comparison (Patreon)

PANEL 1

Exterior establishing shot of CLARA’S CAFE. Night. This is an old timey classic cafe. It has one giant window that has “CAFE” written on it in big letters. Through the window, we can see Gabriel, Jacky and Chuck paying for their supper. Chuck now wears Gabriel’s cowboy hat and holding a piece of pie to take home. He had two tonight.  An old woman, CLARA (65) with grey hair and a smile with a pink waitress uniform, hands money back to Gabriel. 

** I leave this to you as to how much of the scene inside you want to show. 

1. CLARA: And here is your change, sir. Always a pleasure to serve my two biggest tippers!

2. GABRIEL: Thank you ma’am.

3. JACKY: Take care, Clara. 

PANEL 2

The three of them walk out the front door of the cafe hitting the bell on the door. Gabriel eyes Jacky very skeptically. Chuck just eyes his pie. The sun is mostly set. 

1. GABRIEL: So that’s where Bruno’s missing money went, huh?

2. JACKY: Not just to her. A bundle of people in Olympic Heights needed help.  

3. JACKY (LINKED BALLOON): Like Dad always said--

PANEL 3

Gabriel leans against his green 1935 Chevy Pickup Truck. http://oldchevytrucks.com/images/1935%20chevrolet%20jim%20july2002.jpg

He motions to the two of them. This is Uncle Gabriel’s version of a Dad speech.

1. GABRIEL: If you don’t help your neighbors, no one will. Your grandpappy said it too.

2. GABRIEL (LINKED BALLOON): Look, I don’t give a hoot where this money came from. I want you to be careful about what you’re sticking your noses into. 

3. GABRIEL (LINKED BALLOON): I never want you to end up like your daddy.

PANEL 4

Tight on Jacky. She’s sad. She’s asking something that she’s wanted to ask for sometime now. 

1. JACKY: Uncle Gabriel. How did our father die? 

2. JACKY (LINKED BALLOON): It’s been seven months  and all you said was it was an accident. What happened? I’ve asked and asked. 

3. JACKY (LINKED BALLOON): Please, tell me, Uncle Gabriel. I’m 16. I can handle it. I need to know. 

PANEL 5

Tight on Gabriel. Impressed. 

4. GABRIEL: Fair enough.