Jupiter Jet Issue One Page 8 - Script to Page Comparison (Patreon)

PANEL 1

In one long panel, we see several motions of Jacky all at once as she runs down an alleyway. Think like this panel from All Star Superman: (https://longboxgraveyard.files.wordpress.com/2013/02/830px-clark_kent_all-star_superman_003.jpg?w=604&h=302)

First step: she pulls her helmet out of the ruck. 

Second step: she pulls out the jetpack. 

Third step: her right leg hits a bag of trash as she puts on her helmet. 

Fourth step: she falls mid-air to the ground, dropping the jetpack. 

Fifth step: her head hits the ground protected by the helmet, but her other foot catches the dropped jetpack. 

Sixth step: this flips her legs into the air and she lands legs up head down onto another bag of trash lying next to a dumpster. THUD. 

1. SFX: THUD!

PANEL 2

Upside down in the panel with her helmet on, Jacky rubs her head. She’s really hurts. There is a shadow over her. Neil, off panel, has walked up to her after she fell. 

1: JACKY: Ow.

2: NEIL (OFF PANEL): You’re the Soaring Sweetheart?

PANEL 3

Jacky has just got up to her knees. Her dress should be pretty dirty and this should look a little comical as she’s wearing her Jupiter Jet helmet. 

Neil is looking at her and holds out a golden compass. It’s a little old and scuffed, but if you got it as a gift you’d be impressed. 

1: JACKY: Yes. But, I really need to come up with a better name. Can I help you, Neil?

2: NEIL: You forgot this. 

PANEL 4

Tight on Neil’s face. Jacky kisses his cheek and smiles. 

1: JACKY: My father’s compass! Thank you!

2: SFX: mwah!

3: JACKY: Now, stand back. 

PANEL 5

From the street looking up, we see Neil with a very big smile on his face as Jacky blasts high into the sky. Jetpack on, helmet on, but still wearing her dress. Don’t judge, (we can see up her dress and she has old timey bloomers on), she’s in a hurry. Neil watches in wonder. 

1. NEIL: Aces!