JUPITER JET Issue One Page 6 - Page to Script Comparison (Patreon)

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PAGE 6

PANEL 1

Wide Shot of a dark room where the walls are completely black. This should look oddly like it doesn’t belong in our book. There is only a single light source in this room. A blackened window that is off camera.  On the main wall are alcove shelves, at panel left, we see four glowing blue spheres with a fifth slot left empty. At panel right, we see nineteen green tetrahedrons on their alcove shelves with one empty slot. They should look exactly like the one we saw on the previous page. 

Standing in front of these shelves are LEGATE 1 and LEGATE 2. They should look similar to PLUTO except shorter, thinner, with a one-piece jumper uniform that echoe Pluto’s. They both have brown buzzcuts. LEGATE 1 looks concerned. He just got some bad news. 

1. LEGATE 1: Station 9 reports power levels still at 50 percent. 

2. LEGATE 2: Why have they not activated the new power source?

PANEL 2

Behind the Legates, we see the back of PRAETOR PLUTO with his black coat and thick frame. His left hand is dug into the wooden table he stands beside. This Pluto guy is pretty strong. He’s shaking the table as his fury builds. 

1. PLUTO: What are you prattling about, Legates? Have the ruffians failed us again?

2: LEGATE 1: Praetor Pluto! Station 9 was to increase their power levels an hour ago. One can only assume the blimp failed its delivery, sir. 

PANEL 3

Pluto fully revealed! We see the huge imposing mass that he is. Pluto launches the desk out the single window with superhuman strength. It breaks through! It’s going to hit the street! 

1. PLUTO: CURSES!!

PANEL 4

Down on the street below, a MAN in a nice 1930s suit and hat looks up inquisitively. He is holding the leash to his dog, a cute Boston Terrier, who is also looking up. They hear something. 

SILENT PANEL.

PANEL 5

The desk crashes on the spot where the man and dog were standing! The man and dog jump into the air to avoid being hit. It’s a close one. 

1. SFX: CRAASH!

PANEL 6

Tight shot on Pluto. Back in the dark room above which now has a giant hole where a window used to be. 

1. PLUTO: I will deal this myself.