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Tala is a bit more curious than she let on, I think. Aska did mask his climax, but at the cost of really confusing everyone else and making them think he's just weird, old, crazy or...something. No one seemed to have noticed other than the small wolf-girl, and yet Bailey(Baeli) certainly has noticed Tala's noticing.

A few more details about the Long Climb and ceremony will be covered in the next 2-3 pages, but the meeting here in the main tent is just about to wrap up as we move to the ceremony. Whereas this part had more to do with exposition of Predators and Prey, the ceremony focuses solely on Tala.

I...actually have to admit I haven't -entirely- thought out the ceremony thing in terms of specifics, like.. will she be naked? Should I save that reveal for later? What will be said, done, etc. I have the basic, general idea, but have yet to settle on some details. Any small pointers welcome! Won't deviate from the planned story, but I'm always curious what people will see/think of during a tribal fire-side coming-of-age ceremony/ritual.

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Antoine Davis

Hey, so after reading the message, I think that Tala shouldn't be naked. It would feel a bit too early for with how everything is going, so yeah you should save the reveal for later or just have it in the middle. Also the ceremony i think it should have of course a big crowd, not to big but not to small as if this was something that wasn't important. Have it so that it's a bit of a celebration, in which it's focus is Tala, but it should be in a way that's not only positive but to show support for her. Also for the ceremony that the three wolves that Tala is with should give her advice and wish her luck on her journey including chief Aska about the climb. Either way this is going great so far and that if you have any questions, just ask.

Antoine Davis

Also to show that Tala isn't sure for it said that she doesn't want to kill in which if Bailey finds out that she would support her decision in which to just enjoy the ceremony and that they would talk on the climb. Also have them have a conversation, in which not just sex jokes but actual conversation as to what's going on but also for them to know each other better as in what there interest and disinterest's are like actually conversation while on the climb. But yeah that's just my idea. In which Bailey a couple minutes before the ceremony bailey meets up with Tala and talk. But yeah if you have any questions for me just ask.

Bionet

Hm, so what's the general idea for the ceremony? Currently I don't think Tala should be naked for that, but I don't think there's been enough info on what's supposed to happen to give suggestions on details/specifics.

Murphyslaw

Hmmmm when I think tribal coming of age ritual I think of body paint being drawn in tribal designs on maybe Tala's face, back or arms in a small hot tent with a shaman of sorts and a few of the elders, maybe a couple of her peers. I wouldn't have her fully nude yet, maybe a sfw tease or something like her back. Save the big reveal for later! >:3 edit: nice touch on the confused panel btw hahaha

ExtremistLine

I think it's a little too early to give a full opinion on how the ceremony should be done. I think when you put in a coming-of-age ceremony, you've got two ways to do it; either you make it kinda reserved and realistic, where any nudity or other NSFW stuff makes sense in the context (like the body paint someone mentioned above), or you go the opposite route and make it very sexualized, mating in front of crowds or what have you. Since there's much more buildup here compared to Kilimanjaro, I kinda don't know what direction you're going to take Tala and what part Massak will eventually play here and what part the ceremony is gonna play, so....sadly I dunno what kind of suggestions or advice I can give.

fluffkevlar

Well I did say "small pointers", not "full opinion", meaning stuff like "i imagined ceremony with body paint" or "something with fire dancing" etc. Just brief, small ideas that come to mind. It won't be very sexualized, I know that much. But thanks!

fluffkevlar

Yeah not sure really what I was expecting as responses, just small ceremony ideas I think. body paint/dancing/fire etc. The general idea is that Tala makes this journey with one other so that they aren't as reliant on the pack, and come back as a stronger wolf. So, partial test as well. More of that will be explained in the next few pages.

Anonymous

there's a slight error in the second panel

fluffkevlar

That's all actually pretty close to what I had in mind! Yeah some dialogue between the two about a number of things, and the rest. I agree on the fully naked reveal as well. Thanks!

ExtremistLine

Ack, sorry my bad! Well when I think a ceremony like this I'd probably picture, before she has to go out, some drums, maybe some dancing or something similar around a council ring type setting, kinda like how they do Order of the Arrow ceremonies for Boy Scouts, then having body paint or tattoo being a part of it, as a sort of mark for coming of age.

SCPilot

Wait, why does she have to be naked? And why does it involve sex? It could be where the chief cuts a lock of hair and burns it signifying that she is no longer a child but is now an adult. I would stay away from sex related rituals. Heck why not make a dancing ritual!

fluffkevlar

She doesn't have to be naked/involve sex, no. Was just throwing out some ideas.

Captain Lackwit

Naked rituals? Sure why not! Lay thyself bare for the bear- I er, I mean, for nature. Yeah. I do feel like a coming of age -ceremony- ought to be one where one's whole self is something not to be hidden- have everything in the open. Some kind of bold proclamation. As for Bailey... Ohohohohooooooooooly fuck. She is... She is WAY too hot, Fluff. Just, just daaaamn... Way to go man.

SVKwolf

That 4th panel made me chuckle hard. Great work on the expressions and overall really like the way comic is going. Innocent Tala is really cute and it's nice to see her that way :D

Antoine Davis

No problem, sorry for not replying sooner. I don't know about when someone replies to me on this site. But yeah, try to make it a celebration, a bit big in which of course it's for Tala but it's so everyone can enjoy it. Also i was thinking that most if not everyone would have neon fur dye in whichof different logos, designs and or dip dye of hir and that Tala and Baliey enjoy the ceremony before it's time for her to leave. Also, to be honest, i don't want it to be anything involving mind control, hallucinations, or anything like that for it wouldn't feel real. I'm talking about when the certain part(s) happen for it should be real. But yeah thank you for replying, if you have any questions for me just ask.